Dear Imogen ,
I really like your letter , the structure is very well organised and content is to the point and clear. You are stressing many important issues. However , the letter is maybe lacking suggestions for Ms Featherstone to tackle the problem.
This is a great call to action. You will really get Lynne Featherstone’s attention with your impressive facts and statistics. I think that to be a little bit more persuasive, you might make some concrete suggestions as to what you would like her to do, such as bring up the topic in a Parliamentary debate or demand that more UK aid money is used to help alleviate water problems around the world.
Dear Imogen ,
I really like your letter , the structure is very well organised and content is to the point and clear. You are stressing many important issues. However , the letter is maybe lacking suggestions for Ms Featherstone to tackle the problem.
From Lujza
Imogen,
This is a great call to action. You will really get Lynne Featherstone’s attention with your impressive facts and statistics. I think that to be a little bit more persuasive, you might make some concrete suggestions as to what you would like her to do, such as bring up the topic in a Parliamentary debate or demand that more UK aid money is used to help alleviate water problems around the world.
Good luck!
Chris