Hi i’m tamika i really liked your 100 word challenge and yummy i love fruit that would be awesome to be moby and the researcher. I did the 100 word challenge too!
Hi Alice. This is a great story. I like your use of healthy fruit as the exciting prize in the story. I am a fruit lover. Did you know that most people in the United Kingdom don’t eat the recommended 5 portions of fruit and vegetables each day? Your story promotes lovely fruit which is very helpful.
I love the adjectives you have used in this writing Alice. It really makes you feel as if you could taste the fruit yourself! It shows that adding descriptive words into your writing makes the result very enjoyable for the reader. I think Tim and Moby would be very happy to find this treat in the jungle.
Alice,
What a wonderful piece! So lush with descriptive words which makes for an enjoyable read. Good word choices and sentence variety also add to the interest. Keep up the great writing for 100WC. (Teacher of English, Ocean City, NJ, USA)
Dear Alice,
Fruit heaven! What an amazing place. Your writing creates suspence really well. You put lots of your writing skills in. Well done. Thanks for sharing it.
Frang-Shrewsbury International School
Hi i’m tamika i really liked your 100 word challenge and yummy i love fruit that would be awesome to be moby and the researcher. I did the 100 word challenge too!
Hi Alice. This is a great story. I like your use of healthy fruit as the exciting prize in the story. I am a fruit lover. Did you know that most people in the United Kingdom don’t eat the recommended 5 portions of fruit and vegetables each day? Your story promotes lovely fruit which is very helpful.
I love the adjectives you have used in this writing Alice. It really makes you feel as if you could taste the fruit yourself! It shows that adding descriptive words into your writing makes the result very enjoyable for the reader. I think Tim and Moby would be very happy to find this treat in the jungle.
Alice,
What a wonderful piece! So lush with descriptive words which makes for an enjoyable read. Good word choices and sentence variety also add to the interest. Keep up the great writing for 100WC. (Teacher of English, Ocean City, NJ, USA)
Dear Alice,
Fruit heaven! What an amazing place. Your writing creates suspence really well. You put lots of your writing skills in. Well done. Thanks for sharing it.
Frang-Shrewsbury International School