Wow Elena your work just made me want to give loades of money to charity it really shows how despirate some people are for any thing and the pitcher looked really sad and it made me really sad seing this pitcher but why did you you keep on repeting give some money to charity ? welldone
Hello Elena, I like how you have finished your poem with ‘Save someone’s life today’, which is a really powerful statement.
You have really pulled on people’s hearts by writing about all the people and animals are suffering. Could you try and persuade the reader why it’s important for them to help these people and animals rather than letting someone else help?
Excellent persuasive writing Elena! The way you presented this piece was very effective as well because it would catch the eye of your reader and they would remember the sentiments.
Really good becuse it explains why you should give money to charty so it is really good no chandges.
Are you going to give money to charaty?
Wow Elena your work just made me want to give loades of money to charity it really shows how despirate some people are for any thing and the pitcher looked really sad and it made me really sad seing this pitcher but why did you you keep on repeting give some money to charity ? welldone
A really compelling poem, and very creative. May be you should try in your title to persuade people is : Why you should give money to charity.
Hello Elena, I like how you have finished your poem with ‘Save someone’s life today’, which is a really powerful statement.
You have really pulled on people’s hearts by writing about all the people and animals are suffering. Could you try and persuade the reader why it’s important for them to help these people and animals rather than letting someone else help?
Excellent persuasive writing Elena! The way you presented this piece was very effective as well because it would catch the eye of your reader and they would remember the sentiments.