I really like the plot, and your puncuation was perfect. You had great descriptive language. Maybe tell us a little bit more about the family next time.
Hi Rosie,
I like how you discribe the alien it was really good and also liked the way you used your speech marks. You could use similies if you wanted to aswell. What happenend to the aliens heads after? Did you keep them?
Hi Rosie,
That was a really creative blog and I love how you explained the “the creatures” that made me laugh. You had great discription ,but there is something that maybe you could look out for next time maybe a bit more about your surronding. I really enjoyed it well done!
From ava
Hi Rosie
I really like your description especially when you said thin slimey feathers comming out of there blue boddies, because I had a picture of what it would look like, you used alot of punchuation and I think you used it very well, but next time you could use a bit more speech so how they were feeling when the space ship landed outside your house, and what should we do?
From Cleo
I really like the plot, and your puncuation was perfect. You had great descriptive language. Maybe tell us a little bit more about the family next time.
I totally agree with you Alex about the description. Does she need to tell us about the family as she could only say 100wc
Hi Rosie,
I like how you discribe the alien it was really good and also liked the way you used your speech marks. You could use similies if you wanted to aswell. What happenend to the aliens heads after? Did you keep them?
Hi Rosie,
That was a really creative blog and I love how you explained the “the creatures” that made me laugh. You had great discription ,but there is something that maybe you could look out for next time maybe a bit more about your surronding. I really enjoyed it well done!
From ava
Hi Rosie, your work was very funny and I liked the way you described the Aliens and mayby next time you could add some more infomation
Hi Rosie
I really like your description especially when you said thin slimey feathers comming out of there blue boddies, because I had a picture of what it would look like, you used alot of punchuation and I think you used it very well, but next time you could use a bit more speech so how they were feeling when the space ship landed outside your house, and what should we do?
From Cleo
Hi Rosie
I really like how your story ends, and your description. Were there any more aliens in the space ship?
From James
Hi Rosie
That was a very good piece of writing! I could really picture the aliens in my mind!