Your personification is really good, and the descripive language is good. But the ending is a bit random. I don’t think that the characters in Mario Kart had been invented in L.Frank. Baum’s time. But it is very funny.
Hi alex,
I like the descruiption of the Emerald City I also like the randomness of how bowser came in etc. But at the end I don’t get how they could get eaten by Bowser and then smell the macaroni.
Your personification is really good, and the descripive language is good. But the ending is a bit random. I don’t think that the characters in Mario Kart had been invented in L.Frank. Baum’s time. But it is very funny.
Hi alex,
I like the descruiption of the Emerald City I also like the randomness of how bowser came in etc. But at the end I don’t get how they could get eaten by Bowser and then smell the macaroni.
Hi Alex,
I like your crazy imagination and how people from mario came and how bowzer ate everyone.
Hi Alex,
fantastic description I like the bit where you said they all smelt the marvellous,messy, macaroni that was green.
Wonderfully Alex crazy imagination but brilliant imagination hope to see your next blog!
Hi Alex,
You sure have a wild imagination cant wait to see your next blog.
hi
it has great descritption on green.but more descritption on the other words