Hi Lola,
great piece of work, lovely description,but remember capital letters,
(at the start of the second paragraph you did then when it was suppose to be Then because it was the begging of a sentence)
The adjectives that you used to describe the smooth paving stones, but my only improvement is that it didn’t make sense when you changed from third person to first person.
A lovly story.
Hi Lola,
great piece of work, lovely description,but remember capital letters,
(at the start of the second paragraph you did then when it was suppose to be Then because it was the begging of a sentence)
Hi Lola,
The adjectives that you used to describe the smooth paving stones, but my only improvement is that it didn’t make sense when you changed from third person to first person.
Hugo