Hi Jamie
Wow! I really like your writing! Your adjectives are excelent!
My improvement would be to next time try and think of more
ways to say green.
Well done!
I really love the descriptions that you used, and I also thought it was a very clever use that you used for your aliteration. My only improvement is that you should check your spelling.
I think that your adjectives are amazing!
My only improvement is that you should check through some of your spellings.
I agree Hugo, thanks for the comment.
Hi Jamie, I really like your description for green eg: grassy green
But next time check your spelling!
Hi Jamie,
I also like your adjectives
but always remember to read through your work other than that great piece
congratulations!!!
Hi Jamie
I liked how you said worried whispers .My only improvment is that you could decribe the colour of the emerald
Hi Jamie
Wow! I really like your writing! Your adjectives are excelent!
My improvement would be to next time try and think of more
ways to say green.
Well done!
I really love the descriptions that you used, and I also thought it was a very clever use that you used for your aliteration. My only improvement is that you should check your spelling.