Hi,
I really like your work because you used good describing words like
delicious drinks and anxious glance.
you also did good puncuation
But next time try to use some simelies
Hi Hermione
I really like your discriptions and i like they way you didn’t just put green eg.water melon green. the only improvement would be water melon is two words
From Maddie
Hi,
I really like your work because you used good describing words like
delicious drinks and anxious glance.
you also did good puncuation
But next time try to use some simelies
Hi Hermione
I really like your discriptions and i like they way you didn’t just put green eg.water melon green. the only improvement would be water melon is two words
From Maddie