hi Ella I really like your work I really like some of the words you used like creaked and dazzled and you put your punctuation in the right place but some of it didnt make sense.
I really like your personification and description especially when you said “The refreshing green gate creaked open”.
One improvement would be “Bye” is spelt “By”.
hi Ella I really like your work I really like some of the words you used like creaked and dazzled and you put your punctuation in the right place but some of it didnt make sense.
Hi Ella,
lovely piece of work , I like how you have you some of the senses very good!!! 🙂
Hi Ella,
I really like your personification and description especially when you said “The refreshing green gate creaked open”.
One improvement would be “Bye” is spelt “By”.
Good work your story relly had descripshon and lots of intesting parts. Put in paragraphes. WELLDONE!!!!!!!!!!!
Welle done Ella. that is a very descriptive piece of work. I also loved the personification.
well done you have used the five senses well all i would say is check you spelling
I like the action that you talk about. There is a lot of good description. Well done.