the emerald city description Louis.B

Posted on October 15, 2012 by Deleted User
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7 Responses to the emerald city description Louis.B

  1. Thomas says:
    October 15, 2012 at 5:27 pm

    Hi Louis B,
    The bt when you described as being leaf green that was very good but try and work on spelling.

  2. Gabriella says:
    October 15, 2012 at 6:52 pm

    Hi Louis,
    That was a very good description of the emerald city!
    You really described the people of Oz well!!!

  3. Louis H says:
    October 17, 2012 at 6:03 pm

    Hi louis,
    that was an exeptional description I like how you said the emerald city is as luminous as a hot summers day.

  4. Alfie B says:
    October 18, 2012 at 4:23 pm

    this is great Louis relay hope to see your next blog!

  5. Joe says:
    October 19, 2012 at 6:43 am

    Hi Louis,
    I liked your post with all the lovely description, I agree with Louis H. I think your work needs some commas and full stops, but I have no idea where to put them.

  6. julius says:
    October 21, 2012 at 12:14 pm

    Hi Louis B,

    I like your story, you used very good similes.

    from Julius

  7. Daniel J says:
    October 21, 2012 at 6:53 pm

    Hi Louis,
    I love your similes and your amazing descriptive words. You could work on putting commas and ands in in the text

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