The Emerald City

7 Responses to The Emerald City

1. Gabriella says:

   October 15, 2012 at 6:48 pm

   Hi Dilan,
   Wow! Wonderful descriptions! You used a very good
   way of describing the colour green. However my
   favourite description that you used to describe green
   was when you said, “Parrot green” at the beginning.
   Well done!
2. Rosie says:

   October 18, 2012 at 4:49 pm

   Hi Dilan,
   I thought you had wonderfull ways of describing the colour green like
   ‘smooth, slippery lime green candy’. Why did you only describe the
   womans and girls hair? Next time to inprove, add some connectives
   or commas to make the sentence longer and sometimes add some similes.
   keep up the good work,
   Rosie
3. Milla says:

   October 18, 2012 at 5:14 pm

   Hi Dillan
   well done some great discriptive languge
   was used i liked the way you discribed
   how the city is daily as it tells you lots
   about the place
   good job!
4. jackson says:

   October 21, 2012 at 11:04 am

   hi Dilan
   I really like that you put in the actual story.
   well done
5. Jack says:

   October 21, 2012 at 1:21 pm

   Hi Dilan,
   I enjoyed your work. I especially liked your description of the lime green candy
6. Cleo says:

   October 21, 2012 at 4:23 pm

   Hi I really like your work because you used very good punchuation Because you used it exactly where it has to go,
   I also really like you discribing words like popcorn popping
   But next time you do a blog try to use more simelies.
7. CLEM says:

   October 22, 2012 at 8:38 am

   I rely like your descripshion for the city, you need a full stop at the end.

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