This is really interesting, although I got a little confused. Was the character really in the newspaper? Who was talking throughout. You used the word “rage” an awful lot, which is cool if you intended to, but if not you might want to find some synonyms to enhance your vocabulary and your writing.
Wow your writting really makes me feel like I’m in your shoes Write now.
I think this is really good. You can make up really good stories with only a few words to work with.
Very interesting story, good job.
WOW! This is awesome I hate when you get in trouble for things!
Oh, that was a great story. I loved reading it. With every word I wanted to know more. Great job, I liked it!
Great job writing! I liked how you didn’t tell us the end so we have something to think about.
This is a really good post. I hate to get into trouble.
Your story is very good. You are missing some full stops. You are very good writer. Keep up the good work!!!
Hi Jake,
A very good, dramatic story. I really felt awful for the speaker. I like the different emotions that you bring in to the piece, also.
Well done. 4amWriter/Team 100 WC
This is really interesting, although I got a little confused. Was the character really in the newspaper? Who was talking throughout. You used the word “rage” an awful lot, which is cool if you intended to, but if not you might want to find some synonyms to enhance your vocabulary and your writing.
Good job.
I agree about the rage bit. Maybe Jake could use a thesaurus to get more words for it? Like:
Fury
Temper
furious
I really enjoyed reading that. I thought it was really good. Keep up the good work.