Well done Alfie! It’s great to see you writing on the blog. You have used some great connectives in your 100wc. Remember that each idea is one sentence and you should put a full stop after each sentence.
Keep up the good work 🙂
Well done Alfie..I loved how you have used emotions, especially the word ‘heart broken’. I would also agree with Mrs Cohen, you need to put a full stop after each idea, other wise it is very hard to read.
Looking forward to reading more of your work!
Well done Alfie! It’s great to see you writing on the blog. You have used some great connectives in your 100wc. Remember that each idea is one sentence and you should put a full stop after each sentence.
Keep up the good work 🙂
Well done Alfie..I loved how you have used emotions, especially the word ‘heart broken’. I would also agree with Mrs Cohen, you need to put a full stop after each idea, other wise it is very hard to read.
Looking forward to reading more of your work!