Hi Ava,
I think you have done very well with your creative writing. I especialy like how you have described the bird at start, if you were to do it again you could add more information about the little girl.
Well done,
from Rosie.
Excellent, Ava!
This is a really nice story with an interesting theme. You’ve told it really well with interesting language and it has a nice flow to it, across your paragraphs.
wow! What a good story Ava, I like your creative
writing!
Hi Ava,
I think you have done very well with your creative writing. I especialy like how you have described the bird at start, if you were to do it again you could add more information about the little girl.
Well done,
from Rosie.
Excellent, Ava!
This is a really nice story with an interesting theme. You’ve told it really well with interesting language and it has a nice flow to it, across your paragraphs.
Well done!
Hi Ava
that was a great post
you put lots of description about the setting and the bird
well done
I look forward to reading your next post
From Milla