Billy–don’t be so harsh on the parents! I suppose they are going by “logic” and celebrating your birthday on the appropriate years! Can you imagine how tough it would be if your birthday were really on Leap Year? 🙁 Be mindful to reread your writing aloud as the sentence that begins “My horrible parents . . .” has some issues. All in all, good job for this 100WC. Keep it up!
Wow Anna, this is an amazing piece of writing, I liked the way you opened your first sentence with a very strong opening. But your second sentence doesnt quite make sence, because you have put-you might be wondering why so hear goes. To make it make sence you have to correct the hear to hereand when you wrote so here goes, makesure you put a comma before why. But overall, you did a great job on the 100 WC. Keep up the great work!
Billy–don’t be so harsh on the parents! I suppose they are going by “logic” and celebrating your birthday on the appropriate years! Can you imagine how tough it would be if your birthday were really on Leap Year? 🙁 Be mindful to reread your writing aloud as the sentence that begins “My horrible parents . . .” has some issues. All in all, good job for this 100WC. Keep it up!
Wow Anna, this is an amazing piece of writing, I liked the way you opened your first sentence with a very strong opening. But your second sentence doesnt quite make sence, because you have put-you might be wondering why so hear goes. To make it make sence you have to correct the hear to hereand when you wrote so here goes, makesure you put a comma before why. But overall, you did a great job on the 100 WC. Keep up the great work!
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Hi Anna,
We really enjoyed your story, I like the fact that you said ‘four, (one)’