This is an exellant piece of work. You have used some fantastic vocabuary in your work.
I wonder what you will get for your birthday?
What an exellent peice of work Jake I read it and it was mindblowing. I especially loved the sentence…. In a blink of an eye I was asleep. I also liked when you included the time and left for the people reading your story get thinking. Superb!!
Don’t worry Jake – I’ll still get you a present …
I thought this was an excellent composition (and not just because I’m related to Jake). Look forward to seeing what happens next …
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This is an exellant piece of work. You have used some fantastic vocabuary in your work.
I wonder what you will get for your birthday?
What an exellent peice of work Jake I read it and it was mindblowing. I especially loved the sentence…. In a blink of an eye I was asleep. I also liked when you included the time and left for the people reading your story get thinking. Superb!!
Don’t worry Jake – I’ll still get you a present …
I thought this was an excellent composition (and not just because I’m related to Jake). Look forward to seeing what happens next …