Great short story Louis. I really like the way this 100wc feels sharp and to the point, like you are making up for wasted time. Watch out that you use punctuation properly. A very funny entrance I look forward to more!
Well done Louis on this weeks 100WC.
What a great idea to use the prompt. You have used some great adjectives like ‘heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty pad locks’. i can just picture you stood there realising you had turned up a day early.
Keep up the good work and keep entering the 100WC.
Wow! Louis, this is fantastic, you have used some great adjectives and openers. You have also used the prompt in a brilliant but different way which made me feel your frustration at your wasted journey. Well done,
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Super story Louis! I love the description you have put into the story and I love this part ‘which were heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty pad locks’ I could imagine it staring at me with a really innocent but devious look! You have also used great openers such as honestly and basically which add a lot more affect to your story. I can tell that the journey must have been really annoying because you wasted all of that time on it! Well done from Ross at http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
I like the good adjectives used,heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty padlocks.It was certainly a big waste of time.
It would have been pretty annoying if it was true.You used good words for said like exclaimed.Overall I think this piece of work is a quality piece of work.
Great short story Louis. I really like the way this 100wc feels sharp and to the point, like you are making up for wasted time. Watch out that you use punctuation properly. A very funny entrance I look forward to more!
Well done Louis on this weeks 100WC.
What a great idea to use the prompt. You have used some great adjectives like ‘heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty pad locks’. i can just picture you stood there realising you had turned up a day early.
Keep up the good work and keep entering the 100WC.
Wow! Louis, this is fantastic, you have used some great adjectives and openers. You have also used the prompt in a brilliant but different way which made me feel your frustration at your wasted journey. Well done,
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Super story Louis! I love the description you have put into the story and I love this part ‘which were heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty pad locks’ I could imagine it staring at me with a really innocent but devious look! You have also used great openers such as honestly and basically which add a lot more affect to your story. I can tell that the journey must have been really annoying because you wasted all of that time on it! Well done from Ross at http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
Hi Louis,
I think your story is great, with it’s amazing description.
I like the good adjectives used,heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty padlocks.It was certainly a big waste of time.
It would have been pretty annoying if it was true.You used good words for said like exclaimed.Overall I think this piece of work is a quality piece of work.
Hi louis
very discriptive and nice vocabulary but work on puncuation