Time Waistin’

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7 Responses to Time Waistin’

  1. Alice Green says:

    Great short story Louis. I really like the way this 100wc feels sharp and to the point, like you are making up for wasted time. Watch out that you use punctuation properly. A very funny entrance I look forward to more!

  2. Sara Green (Team 100WC) says:

    Well done Louis on this weeks 100WC.
    What a great idea to use the prompt. You have used some great adjectives like ‘heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty pad locks’. i can just picture you stood there realising you had turned up a day early.
    Keep up the good work and keep entering the 100WC.

  3. Sophie (High Lawn) says:

    Wow! Louis, this is fantastic, you have used some great adjectives and openers. You have also used the prompt in a brilliant but different way which made me feel your frustration at your wasted journey. Well done,
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  4. Ross(highlawn) says:

    Super story Louis! I love the description you have put into the story and I love this part ‘which were heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty pad locks’ I could imagine it staring at me with a really innocent but devious look! You have also used great openers such as honestly and basically which add a lot more affect to your story. I can tell that the journey must have been really annoying because you wasted all of that time on it! Well done from Ross at http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net

  5. Joseph says:

    Hi Louis,
    I think your story is great, with it’s amazing description.

  6. Alex s says:

    I like the good adjectives used,heavily locked with glistening chains and rusty padlocks.It was certainly a big waste of time.
    It would have been pretty annoying if it was true.You used good words for said like exclaimed.Overall I think this piece of work is a quality piece of work.

  7. Jesse says:

    Hi louis
    very discriptive and nice vocabulary but work on puncuation

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