Imogen this is a great story! You’ve used some good descriptive words. It sounds like you are sad at the end, but you should be happy that your friend remembered your special day. Nice work!
Brilliant! I thought you really thought about this 100 word challenge and chose your words very carefully to build up the structure of you short story. Thundering and Scampering the two words you used in two of your sentences really got me going and I loved it all the way to the end, this certainly wasn’t a bore! Well done on this week’s prompt of ‘Oh dear I forgot it was leap year!’
Matthew- http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
Imogen, this was a great passage of writing. The descriptive words that you used were great! Try to focus on the structure of your sentences next time but overall, amazing work, well done!
I loved all of the adjectives you used! This is a great story!
Imogen this is a great story! You’ve used some good descriptive words. It sounds like you are sad at the end, but you should be happy that your friend remembered your special day. Nice work!
Mrs. Schur (St. John Vianney)
Brilliant! I thought you really thought about this 100 word challenge and chose your words very carefully to build up the structure of you short story. Thundering and Scampering the two words you used in two of your sentences really got me going and I loved it all the way to the end, this certainly wasn’t a bore! Well done on this week’s prompt of ‘Oh dear I forgot it was leap year!’
Matthew- http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
I really liked your story and the whole deafening bells thing about the clock.
Imogen, this was a great passage of writing. The descriptive words that you used were great! Try to focus on the structure of your sentences next time but overall, amazing work, well done!