Wow, great descriptive language, Fred! I especially liked “bull-like nemesis” and “a sea of grey”. I wonder what the man wanted, and what he was shouting as he chased Paul and Pauline. Perhaps you should include this in your story.
Keep on writing and learning.
Mrs. Van Team 100WC
Hi Fred,
I would like to know what happened to the ‘bull like’ nemesis. I think that you were really descriptive and I would like too
find out what happens next, well done.
Wow, great descriptive language, Fred! I especially liked “bull-like nemesis” and “a sea of grey”. I wonder what the man wanted, and what he was shouting as he chased Paul and Pauline. Perhaps you should include this in your story.
Keep on writing and learning.
Mrs. Van Team 100WC
Hi Fred,
I would like to know what happened to the ‘bull like’ nemesis. I think that you were really descriptive and I would like too
find out what happens next, well done.
Hi Fred
Your story has a good layout and good adjectives. Next time check punctuation.
Well done