Hello Isobel,
You have created quite an unsettling story. Your word choices and sentence structure compliment the tone and mood of your piece. The resolute silence phrase you used gave an eerie feeling of foreboding in the moments before the creature began to unleash it’s wrath.
The description of the room was slightly confusing. I am not sure why the room was demolished before the Furby was activated. I would have also thought a smaller more confined space would have been creepier to have had to share with the Furby than a wide room.
The story strikes an unusual chord with me. When my daughter was young we bought her a Furby. She was absolutely terrified by the toy. It unnerved her so much that we disposed of it immediately. Even now in her twenties if she hears the mention of a Furby she has the same reaction. Maybe she knew something that we didn’t about their truly evil potential!
Thank you very much for sharing your imagination,
Gina Felton (Team 100, Iowa USA)
Thank you. I really enjoyed doing the 100 word challenge , it was my first one. Your comments will help me with my next piece of writing. My sister has a Furby and it does seem to be almost human. My Mum says it reminds her of a Gremlin!
Izzy i like the short sentens.
Hello Isobel,
You have created quite an unsettling story. Your word choices and sentence structure compliment the tone and mood of your piece. The resolute silence phrase you used gave an eerie feeling of foreboding in the moments before the creature began to unleash it’s wrath.
The description of the room was slightly confusing. I am not sure why the room was demolished before the Furby was activated. I would have also thought a smaller more confined space would have been creepier to have had to share with the Furby than a wide room.
The story strikes an unusual chord with me. When my daughter was young we bought her a Furby. She was absolutely terrified by the toy. It unnerved her so much that we disposed of it immediately. Even now in her twenties if she hears the mention of a Furby she has the same reaction. Maybe she knew something that we didn’t about their truly evil potential!
Thank you very much for sharing your imagination,
Gina Felton (Team 100, Iowa USA)
Hi Isobel
I like how you used short sentences.
I liked it how you wrote ‘Run?…….. Hide?…….’.
Thank you. I really enjoyed doing the 100 word challenge , it was my first one. Your comments will help me with my next piece of writing. My sister has a Furby and it does seem to be almost human. My Mum says it reminds her of a Gremlin!