Hi Isobel
I like it how you wrote ‘repulsive’. I also like it how you wrote at the end ‘NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO’ Next time please spell O like this Oh apart from that great.
Hello,
The concept of your piece is unique. Telling the entire story through dialogue is very original.
Perhaps adding more descriptive words or some more humor into the story would have added extra depth and emotion.
I can sympathize with your mom. I am not the world’s greatest chef either! Oftentimes I have felt bad for my family as they try to choke down my futile attempts at cooking!
Thank you for sharing your story,
Gina Felton (Team 100, Iowa USA)
Hi Isobel
I like it how you wrote ‘repulsive’. I also like it how you wrote at the end ‘NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO’ Next time please spell O like this Oh apart from that great.
this is so good izzy.i love the bit about the next day.
Hello,
The concept of your piece is unique. Telling the entire story through dialogue is very original.
Perhaps adding more descriptive words or some more humor into the story would have added extra depth and emotion.
I can sympathize with your mom. I am not the world’s greatest chef either! Oftentimes I have felt bad for my family as they try to choke down my futile attempts at cooking!
Thank you for sharing your story,
Gina Felton (Team 100, Iowa USA)
Thank you for your comments I will consider them in my next piece of writing.